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I wrote this song with the hope that somebody famous would plagiarise it and I could then make lotsa money in the ensuing court case. A quick scene setter: verse one: A man and a woman are sitting at a table across from one another in a one room almost bare wooden house like in a 1950's cowboy film. He is speaking verse two: He has stood up and she is looking as if she is about to cry solo guitar, He kisses her face for the last time and heads to the door At the reprise He opens the door and turns his head back one more time and then goes out into the open country side, dark storm clouds on the horizon and strides purposefully into the distance. She is at the door crying as it starts to rain. This is goodbye
this is the last time I tell you I love you this is the last time I tell you I care I've had enough of your crying I've had enough of our lies now you can see that for once in my life I am free it hurts me to say but we both know its true cos this is the end this is goodbye this is goodbye goodbye don't you dare follow me as I walk out the door out your life I wont look back as the sky starts to fall I wont cry its takin' me all of my trying it's cost us both part of our lives now you can see that for once in your life I am free it hurts me to say but we both know its true cos this is the end this is goodbye this is goodbye goodbye solo it hurts me to say but we both know its true cos this is the end this is goodbye this is goodbye goodbye RealTracks in song: 793:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming ModernCountrySync Ev 100 RealTracks in song: 2051:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 085 RealDrums in Song: Tango: a: Kick, Snare b: 4x Kick, Snare me on everything else using Proteus Emu free, NI FM7 enjoy Alyn
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Very cool Alyn!! You had me wondering when I saw the other instruments listed and I was hearing only the finger picked guitar, but the instrumental ending was GREAT! I like the way you kept it simple until the end. Some really beautiful chord changes in this. Great to have you around here again. Really enjoyed this!! Take care and stay around. Greg
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Alyn,
It's so great to have you back posting on the forum. No-one, absolutely no-one can do what you do. Everything you write is classic gibson through and through. I always enjoy what you bring to Users Showcase.
Hopefully one day I'll read about this song in the paper in a multimillion dollar lawsuit!
All the best,
Noel
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Hi Alyn.
A fabulous track.
Wonderful contrast between the super smooth guitar and the voice which is just SO full of attitude. You manage to capture all the bitterness and resentment in the lyric, then team it with a folk guitar backing and amazingly it all works like magic. Very Gibson.
The ending was inspired.
You need to get someone to make the video!
ROG.
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Alyn,
Most enjoyable and inventive- clever ending and an all round top song.
Enjoyed how you set the scene and resolved the piece. Good one.
Peter
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Alyn, This is great! The full Gibson...  Bob
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Your opening comments made me smile. I've long said I want to be very rich, be it from talent or litigation.
So glad to see you active on the forum. Your songs are always top notch and thought provoking.
Enjoyed this one a lot.
Charlie
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Alyn.
This is absolutely beautiful!
The lyric is heartbreaking.
"this is the last time I tell you I love you" ... What an opening line!!!
"don't you dare follow me as I walk out the door out your life" ... Just as strong as the opener!!!
"I wont look back as the sky starts to fall I wont cry" ... Oh...wow..nice...
The melody (and accompanying chords) is absolutely STUNNING. Gorgeous with a capital G. Like something McCartney would come up with. With a little help from Lennon. (in fact, I was wishing there was some of that typical below-the-melody harmony that they used to do).
This is a song I wish I had written.
Damn! This is good! I love it. Can't stop listening to it...
Love your vocal on this. Cool production.
Big Standing O, buddy.
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Hello, Alyn
The melody lines made with the isomorphic iteration of phrasing are very beautiful.
The lyrics are heartbreaking and painful.
I do love the lyrics.
And your vocal that reminds John Lennon a little bit is very fitted with this tune.
Very enjoyed the listen.
Best Regards.
Shigeki Adachi
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"this is the last time I tell you I love you
this is the last time I tell you I care"
Wow, do those lines ever establish the theme.
The juxtaposition of your vocals and the RTs is brilliant!
Welcome back with a great song!
J&B
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Very cool Alyn!! You had me wondering when I saw the other instruments listed and I was hearing only the finger picked guitar, but the instrumental ending was GREAT! I like the way you kept it simple until the end. Some really beautiful chord changes in this. Great to have you around here again. Really enjoyed this!! Take care and stay around. Greg Thanks Greg, Ole Brent plays some mean fingerpickin' and his playing just added so much, as I initially had the strum guitar all the way through, that he HAD to play alone. So glad you enjoyed it Yeh I'll try and stay this time 
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Alyn,
It's so great to have you back posting on the forum. No-one, absolutely no-one can do what you do. Everything you write is classic gibson through and through. I always enjoy what you bring to Users Showcase.
Hopefully one day I'll read about this song in the paper in a multimillion dollar lawsuit!
All the best,
Noel Thanks Noel, Rather than a curt case I would like to have my songs stand out on their own LOL Thanks for listening Alyn
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Hi Alyn.
A fabulous track.
Wonderful contrast between the super smooth guitar and the voice which is just SO full of attitude. You manage to capture all the bitterness and resentment in the lyric, then team it with a folk guitar backing and amazingly it all works like magic. Very Gibson.
The ending was inspired.
You need to get someone to make the video!
ROG. Cheers ROG, I wrote the lyrics after listening to a row in the cafe  I cut out the swear words tho  I wish I had done that walk in my divorce rather than creeping away. As it happens I am in contact with a Video company about the loss of my career so I took your advice and emailed then....who knows?? So glad you enjoyed Alyn
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Alyn,
Most enjoyable and inventive- clever ending and an all round top song.
Enjoyed how you set the scene and resolved the piece. Good one.
Peter Thanks Peter, I wish I had thought of what you wrote myself, it nevercrossed my mind I had written a complete piece. Carried away in the heat of the music  Alyn
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Alyn,
This sounds very theatrical. Should be in a big musical!
"...this is goodbye goodbye..."
I can see the curtains slowly closing as the spotlight fades........
Regards,
Bob
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Definitely a full Gibson!
It has enough tightness, and drama to last for a while ;-)
indeed good to have you back posting those truly original songs!
Rob
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Alyn, This is great! The full Gibson... Bob Cheers Bob, thanks for listening and commenting Alyn
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Your opening comments made me smile. I've long said I want to be very rich, be it from talent or litigation.
So glad to see you active on the forum. Your songs are always top notch and thought provoking.
Enjoyed this one a lot.
Charlie I want to be rich, period Glad you enjoyed the theatrics!! thanks for listening Alyn
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Alyn.
This is absolutely beautiful!
The lyric is heartbreaking.
"this is the last time I tell you I love you" ... What an opening line!!!
"don't you dare follow me as I walk out the door out your life" ... Just as strong as the opener!!!
"I wont look back as the sky starts to fall I wont cry" ... Oh...wow..nice...
The melody (and accompanying chords) is absolutely STUNNING. Gorgeous with a capital G. Like something McCartney would come up with. With a little help from Lennon. (in fact, I was wishing there was some of that typical below-the-melody harmony that they used to do).
This is a song I wish I had written.
Damn! This is good! I love it. Can't stop listening to it...
Love your vocal on this. Cool production.
Big Standing O, buddy.
floyd
thanks floyd, thank you, thank you and thank you for that review. the one thing that really means a lot to me was This is a song I wish I had written. Me, I have always wished I could write like you. And this has given me an idea for a song, but don't hold your breath! never thought of a harmony on the vocals as you suggested, interesting idea!! Lennon and McCartney, and Harrison, are/ were great influences stored in my brain. Thank you, floyd! Alyn *buys floyd a large cold one to say thanks*
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Hello, Alyn The melody lines made with the isomorphic iteration of phrasing are very beautiful. The lyrics are heartbreaking and painful. I do love the lyrics. And your vocal that reminds John Lennon a little bit is very fitted with this tune. Very enjoyed the listen. Best Regards. Shigeki Adachi Shigeki, thank you so much for your lovely comments especially the isomorphic iteration of phrasing THAT is an outstanding phrase, I have GOT to use that in a song somehow! thanks for the Lennon reference, he is still a musical hero of mine. take care, Sir, and keep producing YOUR masterpieces Alyn
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