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Man in the moon


This one started out being a demo that Chris sent me with her playing piano but ended up being a guitar song, worked better without the piano. I changed the chord progression somewhat from her original and also came up with the bridge, but everything else, melody and lyrics was written by Chris.

Still not 100% happy with the mix, so any comments on that are appreciated!

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Drums: Song starts with POP12/8and switches over to BluesRock12/8 at the bridge for the remainder of the song (bar 33)
Bass: 1922
Rhythm guitar: 1924
In addition I added two rhythm guitar tracks (tele) and the lead guitar (strat)

MAN IN THE MOON (lyrics by Christiane Spruit, 2017)
V1
In the still of the city lies
Like a baby you're sleeping tight
And the face of the moon above
is spying
V2
And it seems he is calling your name
and I feel my limbs getting lame
and the face in the moon above
keeps smiling
CHORUS:
Man in the moon
Man in the moon
can't get no sleep and I wake up too soon
Man in the Moon
Man in the moon
is there a way to come over to you

Short instrumental break

V3
We're Collecting the stars above
and the way will be long enough
be aware to be part of what
is fading
V4
and the new day is dawning weak
and the hope is arising steep
they who dare, staying brave in me
are not dying

Bridge
In the glow of light
we are expecting to see deamons fly
But the angels are guiding the night
into the the moonlit sky
And the eye of the sky
maybe asking me why am I
expecting to have all of the time
tonight
CHORUS:
Man in the moon
Man in the moon
can't get no sleep and I wake up too soon
Man in the Moon
Man in the moon
is there a way to come over to you

Guitar solo outro

Song also up on soundcloud, here: Man in the moon (soundcloud)

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Chris/Dave,

Cool song.

Chris' vocal is really nice. Guitar leads are sweeeet! Good drums.
The rhythm guitars at the beginning seem "a bit thin" - but then work once the vocals take over. I thought the lead could be a bit louder.

Really enjoyed this.

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I really like modern blues songs like this. I agree with floyd about the thin guitars in the beginning and the overall lead guitars being too soft. I also though the vocals in the chorus need to be louder. they seemed to drop back a bit. I also noticed the dryness of the snare. A touch of verb would help there. Well written and performed by you both. I really liked it. Tom

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love the feel and the melody flows nicely

love the guitar especially on the outro

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Wowser. What a cool tune. super vocal lyric. Guitar dancing in the background was excellent work..... Super tone....


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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Chris/Dave,

Chris' vocal is really nice. Guitar leads are sweeeet! Good drums.
The rhythm guitars at the beginning seem "a bit thin" - but then work once the vocals take over. I thought the lead could be a bit louder.

fj


Originally Posted By: tommyad
I really like modern blues songs like this. I agree with floyd about the thin guitars in the beginning and the overall lead guitars being too soft. I also though the vocals in the chorus need to be louder. they seemed to drop back a bit. I also noticed the dryness of the snare. A touch of verb would help there. Well written and performed by you both. I really liked it. Tom


Wow, great feedback Floyd and Tom! Ok, I've just uploaded a new mix that I think covers everything you two mentioned. I'll revisit it in a couple of days with fresh ears, my ears are pretty much blown out at this point.

Thanks again, I appreciate it! smile

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Hi BlueAttitude, Fantastic work on this! I found this quite easy to listen to and lovely singing too. Well done! smile


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Nice song very well sung and played.

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Chris & Dave,
I liked the mood of this - excellent vocals from Chris and tasty lead... both of which we expect from you & they are still a pleasure to listen to.
You`ve had some good feedback on the mix; the drum change was very noticeable to me which does give a kick to the bridge.

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Originally Posted By: 44kfl
love the feel and the melody flows nicely

love the guitar especially on the outro

Kenny


The outro bit is my favorite part too, thanks Kenny!

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Chris and Dave,

A very expressive song. Good work.

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Originally Posted By: Scott C
Wowser. What a cool tune. super vocal lyric. Guitar dancing in the background was excellent work..... Super tone....


Thanks very much, Scott! Yeah, had as much fun with the rhythm part as I did playing the leads on this one.

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Enjoyed this from start to finish. This is a quality write, performance and production. The lead guitar and vocals are both top notch. I'm liking this song a lot.

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Nicely done.

Good ripping tone on the guitar.


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Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Hi BlueAttitude, Fantastic work on this! I found this quite easy to listen to and lovely singing too. Well done! smile


Thanks, Joe!

Originally Posted By: Sergio Guarneri

Nice song very well sung and played.

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Thanks for the listen and comment, Sergio!

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"and the new day is dawning weak
and the hope is arising steep
they who dare, staying brave in me
are not dying"

Great lines!

Nice write and vocal/guitar (lead and rhythm) performances.

The word "classy" comes to mind.

Yep, we like it!

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Chris and Dave, I like blues and I sure like this. This song has that classic blues vibe with a great vocal that works with your leads very well. This song puts in mind of some of John Fogerty's early work with CCR (The first 2-3 albums) reminiscent of their version of "I put a spell on you". Man I love that stuff!! That music is where I learned to play. Great job and I know you are still tweaking it but it sounds great to me. Take care, Torrey.




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Great stuff - the new mix sounds good. Some lovely licks in the outro.
Top quality all round.

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Originally Posted By: Robertkc
Chris & Dave,
I liked the mood of this - excellent vocals from Chris and tasty lead... both of which we expect from you & they are still a pleasure to listen to.
You`ve had some good feedback on the mix; the drum change was very noticeable to me which does give a kick to the bridge.

Robert


Thanks very much, Robert, we appreciate that!

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A very expressive song. Good work.

Rob and Anne-Marie


Thanks guys!

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