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https://soundcloud.com/belladonna-amaya/playin-with-fools-goldTitle: Playing with Fool’s Gold by Donna J Evans Verse 1 A sunny daisy on a hot July day Born with a silver chisel to carve her way A high roller of the rich and famous world A sparkling diamond called the golden girl She loved a man heir of a cursed dynasty A sculptress determined to mold their destiny Thought she could tame his wild escapades But she headed down a dark highway Chorus Dreams burn like a fire Fleeting passions and desires In the end what’s remembered Is cold ashes and cinders From playin’ with fool's gold Verse 2 She was consoled by angels on a gray wintry day Heartbroken depression is all they would say Drinking and drugs stole her youth's season A wasted life seemingly without reason Demons torment souls with shallow visions The breaking point leaves only scattered pieces A woman not strong enough to rise above A man whose heart’s devoid of love Chorus Bridge For those blinded by glitter Fruit on vines quickly wither In this life all that matters Is the gold dust you scatter @ copyright 10/15/17
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Hi Donna.
Your production chops are coming along nicely, A very interesting write. You have the vocal levels right on this one. The harmonies are very nice. Keep them coming.
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Really great lyrics! Keep 'em coming as Joanna says! 
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Hi Donna,
Nice! Good to hear you. If I may, one suggestion on the lyric:
At the beginning of the second verse, you say: "She ended her life on a grey wintry day"
Might I suggest: "She chose the angels on a grey wintry day"
the remainder of the verse makes it quite obvious she took her life. "She ended her life" is a wee bit stark for the beauty and grace of the rest of the lyric.
That's just my opinion and I could be way off. But, it's a thought that occured to me as I listened.
Very nice sing. Ya did good!
Alan
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Thanks for the nice comment Joanna. Your help was so instrumental in me being here at this point.
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Thanks for comment. I will keep trying.
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Thanks Alan. Yes, I think you may be on to something here. I just thought "She was consoled by angels on a gray wintry day". I do like that.
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Hello Donna, very interesting lyric content! You obviously spent time in deep thought developing them! I have a feeling we will be hearing much more from you as you get more and more familiar with BIAB! Good work! Thanks, Torrey
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Hi Donna.
Your production chops are coming along nicely, A very interesting write. You have the vocal levels right on this one. The harmonies are very nice. Keep them coming. my impression as well. Enjoyed my listen. Charlie
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I enjoyed this deeply considered song - there are some great lines in the sad story!
I`m glad you are finding support for your BiaB journey and that you are sharing your work here.
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Thanks Robert and special thanks to Joanne Cooper who got me here.
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Thanks Alan. Yes, I think you may be on to something here. I just thought "She was consoled by angels on a gray wintry day". I do like that. I like it, too! Much better than my suggestion. Whatever path you take with this, good luck. Alan
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Thanks Robert and special thanks to Joanne Cooper who got me here. My pleasure Donna. Glad to help!
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Very cool lyric Well done
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Thanks Scott. Looking forward to seeing everyone's work here.
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Belladonna,
Nicely done. A good story song. The harmonies are nice. The simple production is effective.
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Dreams burn like a fire
Fleeting passions and desires
In the end what’s remembered
Is cold ashes and cinders
From playin’ with fool's gold
Killer Chorus!
very strong writing
enjoyed the listen,
Kenny
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