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#520647 01/26/19 09:02 PM
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Dark Days

In 2016 I had a dream about a grunge band which split before they got a record deal, but I heard one of their demo song called Dark Days, and I thought in the dream that the song was worth recording. When I woke up, I thought I had to write down that song, although I had only the title and the mood of the song left in my mind. This is what I managed to reconstruct from that dream. This is one of my favorite songs, I'm really satisified with the story, the melody and lyrics especially in the bridge and the outro part, but I think the chorus might still need some rethinking, some issues with rhyming. You may need to study what "great attractor" and "eternal return" mean smile

Anyway, BIAB was a big help to create the right style for the song, the drums and solo guitarists fit perfectly my vision.

RealDrums: MetalHalfTime, MetalSlowBigTomGroove
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Acoustic guitar #2051
Acoustic piano #1690
Electric bass #387
Electric guitar #1000, #1689, #390, #2584, #2585
Electric guitar solo #1530, #2586
Synth pad #1840

Sound effects: rumble, wood warbler

Vocals: Janne (+BIAB audio harmonies in the bridge)

Lyrics:

At the beginning, we felt hot
after the big bang, I still loved you a lot.
The universe expands
I have learned it by heart
you said it thousand times
when we grew apart.

Dark days
dark energy scatters the rays
and pushes us away
from each other
to the blurred outskirts of space.
Dark days
the negative pressure repels
the hopeless struggle against
the guardian of
the Great Attractor of love.

I saw the symptoms of decay
after the rapture, I still begged you to stay.
The entropy increased
you warned me to mind the gap
no bridge across the rift
on your stellar map.

Dark days...

You are a tiny satellite
exploring cosmic sights
unknown, new frontiers
like those Pioneers.
Once the light of my sky
now a distant probe
a shrinking dot in my telescope.
Through the interstellar dust
you have your wanderlust
and when the last photon fully disappears
beyond the Milky Way
it's going to be a very dark day.

Dark days...

I recall the moment when
a glimpse of sunlight
played the romance in your hair
but can't recall the clouding
near the particle horizon
hiding our flare
shall it burn at the eternal return?

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Janne


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jannesan #520659 01/26/19 11:41 PM
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Good song! I like the groove and those guitars sound great.

I googled "great attractor" and "eternal return", interesting stuff indeed!

jannesan #520665 01/26/19 11:56 PM
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I'm glad you've opted for the astronomically arcane rather than the astrological sort.
Metaphors abound: love on other planets meets the black hole of relationship truth.
Some good dynamics too.


Cheers
rayc
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jannesan #520679 01/27/19 01:51 AM
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You have interesting dreams...
And you have successfully melded astronomical & human concepts into a pleasant song...
I enjoyed the listen.


Jim
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jannesan #520681 01/27/19 01:59 AM
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"At the beginning, we felt hot
after the big bang, I still loved you a lot."

This is a great opening lyric. I like the chorus's kinetic energy as it pushes the song forward. I love the instrumentation.

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Sounds great Janne! The chord structure in this is awesome, especially on the chorus! Thanks, Torrey




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Hi, Janne !:))


I like this tune !
It is very melodical
and original at the same
time ! This is one of your
best Janne !:))

Cheers
Dani

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jannesan #520760 01/27/19 09:38 AM
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Janne,

What a magnificent sound you've managed to create! You certainly know how to create a full, vibrant backing that stands professionally produced.

As rayc has said, metaphors abound. Your lyrics created some outstanding imagery within my mind. It sounds like you had a heap of fun creating and producing this song. It's a real credit to you!

All the best,
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That's a really great story behind the song. I find creatives tend to have things "come to them in dreams" quite a bit and I always love seeing the results! Thanks for sharing.


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Cool song

Great story

love those drums!

nice groove and progressions

enjoyed,

Kenny

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Janne,

Marvelous opening! Cool sounds and killer guitar.

Terrific melody. Your chord progression, too. Nice vocals. The drums are excellent.
Everything works to create an excellent sonic landscape. Good mix.
You kept my attention the whole time.
I really like this.

An excellent piece of music.

fj

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Janne,
A big sound - I like the changes and epic feel of this. The lyrics (far more literate than Grunge!),are cool.
The rumble ending fits- and the mix very good.

Robert

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Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Good song! I like the groove and those guitars sound great.
I googled "great attractor" and "eternal return", interesting stuff indeed!


Thanks Dave for your kind feedback smile Space is very inspirational subject, makes you wonder the beauty of the universe and your own existence.

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Originally Posted By: rayc
I'm glad you've opted for the astronomically arcane rather than the astrological sort.
Metaphors abound: love on other planets meets the black hole of relationship truth.
Some good dynamics too.


Thanks Ray for your kind words, you have given excellent description for the story smile

Janne


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Originally Posted By: Jim
You have interesting dreams...
And you have successfully melded astronomical & human concepts into a pleasant song...
I enjoyed the listen.


Thanks Jim, I'm glad you enjoyed the outcome of my dream smile

Janne


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Hi janne,

a good composition, well-arranged. Interesting lyrics. Enjoyed the listen!

Cheers,

Stefan

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Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
"At the beginning, we felt hot
after the big bang, I still loved you a lot."
This is a great opening lyric. I like the chorus's kinetic energy as it pushes the song forward. I love the instrumentation.


Thanks for liking the opening lines smile Also the 'kinetic energy' is a great description for an astronomical song, I'm glad you liked the chorus because I was thinking that the song is too long and I should probably do some editing on the expense of the choruses.

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Originally Posted By: Torrey Bliss
Sounds great Janne! The chord structure in this is awesome, especially on the chorus! Thanks, Torrey


Thanks Torrey, I appreciate your kind and positive feedback smile

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Originally Posted By: dani48
I like this tune !
It is very melodical
and original at the same
time ! This is one of your
best Janne !:))
Cheers
Dani


Thanks Dani for your positive words smile

Janne


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Originally Posted By: Noel96
What a magnificent sound you've managed to create! You certainly know how to create a full, vibrant backing that stands professionally produced.
As rayc has said, metaphors abound. Your lyrics created some outstanding imagery within my mind. It sounds like you had a heap of fun creating and producing this song. It's a real credit to you!
All the best,
Noel


Thanks Noel for your very kind words, your feedback is very valuable to me smile Nice to hear you liked the sound and lyrical imagery.

Janne


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