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One More Whiskey SongSo the original title for this song, right up until the last second, was Another Floyd Jane song. I was doing it as a joke for Floyd as Tater Totts to compete with him in the gut-wrenching, heartbreaking, cry your eyes out genre. But when I got finished with EVERYTHING, I said, "No. This is not that bad. Change the title and hook to one more WHISKEY song." Maybe next time Floyd! There is still time!! ONE MORE WHISKEY SONG by David Snyder https://soundcloud.com/david-snyder-gigs3/one-more-whiskey-songV1 Driving down the road I crashed my car She flew through the windshield And hit that asphalt tar Might have had too much to drink Don't remember all that much But the sheriff said my breath did stink They put handcuffs on me, first, then came the hospital room PC And she looked up at me with tears in her eyes Said I guess our love has brought me to the end of my life In a few more minutes I'll be gone So could you sing me Just one more Whiskey song CH Sing me one more Whiskey song before I die Cuz you were drinking and you wrecked that car Should have never learned to drive But at least the song might make you a country music star About whiskey, and a car wreck And a love affair gone wrong So sing me...while you're crying and I'm dying Just one more Whiskey song V2 Next thing I knew I was headed down death row With shackles on my feet so I was walking mighty slow The warden said the chair is ready and you know it won't be long So before you get that shock Could you sing us one more song CH Sing me one more Whiskey song before you die Cuz you were drinking and you wrecked that car Should have never learned to drive But at least the song might make you a country music star About your love affair with whiskey And a human life that’s gone So sing me...while you're crying and dying Just one more Whiskey song Bridge And some bets that are made Are just made to be lost When I rolled and flipped that car I regret the dice I tossed CH So I’ll sing you one more Whiskey song before I die I was drinking and I wrecked that car Should have never learned to drive But at least the song might make me country music star So let me sing it one more time for all the things that I’ve done wrong Just one more Whiskey song Oh just one more Whiskey song Music and lyrics copyright 2023 by David Snyder. ASCAP/Day of Faith Records David Snyder: Guitar, Vocals, instrumentation, mixing, mastering production. RealTracks in style: 1036:Bass, Electric, NorthernRockBallad Ev 065 RealTracks in style: 832:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm AltCountryMoody Ev 075 RealTracks in style: 803:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm DrivingCountryBalladClean Ev 065 RealTracks in style: ~~365:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 085 RealDrums in style:AmericanaSlowRockFred^2-a:Sidestick ,HiHat , b:HiHat ,Snare
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Hi there David. I like the hook to this and really like the cord progression and overall sound of the song. I realize the writing started out as just having some fun with Floyd, but with a bit of work and your writing/production talent I think you could have a seriously good song here. You're always good at stirring up some fun on the forum, looks like we're in for another good year of fun with David Snyder!
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Thanks Brad,
I just sent you a p.m.
Would love to hear your thoughts on revisions.
Yeah, it started out as a total joke until I realized it might have a nugget to it.
Let's talk.
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Hey David.
A little controversial for some and you probably won't get it on a major label, but it's clever writing so your work is done.
Who needs major labels anyway?
Good production too.
Vic
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Glad to see you're back on the sunny side of life again.
That's a little on the dark side but it is well done
Last edited by Guitarhacker; 01/15/23 01:27 AM.
You can find my music at: www.herbhartley.comAdd nothing that adds nothing to the music. You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both. The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.
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Hi Dave. This is excellent.
Funny thing, I just finished writing a whisky song.
"When in doubt write a whisky song"
All the best with this
Regards Rob 4580
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Thanks Vic! Hopefully, it filled your heart with good cheer and frivolity!!  Do you think they will play it at your local pub as a happy sing a long???
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Dave, The chorus is killer. The chord progression is excellent, The guitars sound great. I'm not sure about the first verse. To my ears there is an extra line in there at the end that doesn't match up with the 2nd verse. But hey maybe you wanted it that way. There's no rules especially in Snyderworld! You are your own man. I listened multiple times ,so i guess that's what we're after. I enjoyed it a whole lot. Here's to ya, Tom
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Now that is a freakin' funny song!
I really liked this.
I few suggestions if I may:
Turn the car into a pickup truck
Get mad as your easy rider rifle rack and rifle got busted
The moonshine you were hauling rolled off the truck and hit a train
and the train caught on fire
Yes sir that would be bonafide country song!
Just kidding this is a really great song as is!
Have you ever noticed there are no lines to a bathroom at a water park?
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Hi, David. Well, emulating Floyd Jane is a terrific motivator, but a lofty goal unattainable by most. Man, you definitely have that "gut-wrenching, heartbreaking, cry your eyes out genre" down. Your lyrics are so good, and my favorite line is "Next thing I knew I was headed down death row." That's overkilling the sadness. You had a good girl there who still wanted to hear another song of yours, and even the warden had good taste.
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Mario,
This is country gold.
We need to do a co-write.
Meet me at Jack's BBQ in ten minutes.
Bring your six string.
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REALLY cool progressions & structure with a good band.
Is whisky really as prevalent in US life as your songs suggest?
I loathe the stuff myself and don't know anyone who drinks it other than my old man.
It's funny but dangerous, sad but a parody.
I assume the almost rhymes are part of the fun too.
Cheers
rayc
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Was that a song about having one more whiskey or one more song about whiskey?  Either way, you had me at the title! Fun write, exactly as promised. You've once again demonstrated the golden rule of sad country songs: when you think you've crossed the line, just keep on walking. Speaking of walking: Next thing I knew I was headed down death row
With shackles on my feet so I was walking mighty slowNow that's a lyric! 
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Very funny, a country parody to be taken seriously, you never fail to surprise. Now I have an urge to write my own whiskey song and somehow make it mightier than yours Janne
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Cool country tune David. Excellent lyric and loved the backtrack. Well done
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Thanks Herb! Yeah, just an natural born optimist man. I may be walking down death row, but at least I have this country song!!
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David,
Terrific write and a great hook! As ray noted, really cool chord progressions in this and I like the choice of the electric guitars on this production. On the whole, it's a little dark thematically, but a slick listen regardless. Great stuff!
All my best to you,
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Thanks Rob! Can't wait to hear it!
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Excellent song David!
Especially the chorus, great music there.
This is a real "David song".
And you sing it very well.
Rob and Anne-Marie
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"The warden said the chair is ready
and you know it won't be long
So before you get that shock
Could you sing us one more song"
Does it get any better than THAT???
As I said in an earlier thread - I told Bill, when he sent me the lyric - that I've never liked dead-wife songs. Dead-soldier songs are even worse (and then he sent me one of those, too). Fortunately we stopped before doing the dead-dog song.
BUT.... I never considered the I-caused-my-girlfriend's-death song.
Dark humor runs cold in your veins, son.
Excellent modern-Country backing. Love those guitars!
An excellent vocal for The Row. Death or Country Music.
Y'all ain't right.
An we get the rewards from that...
Count us Lucky.
fj
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