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A song made from a mixed bag of childhood memories; as jumbled as they get, for me they are anchored to a place. One of my favourites is mostly built up now, but they recently gave one of the new streets a name that summed up things I recall.
With thanks to Janice and Bud for kindly agreeing to bring their magic to this one.


Swallows Rise ( with Janice)

video ( my second try at a song vid.):

Swallows Rise/video

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Swallows Rise

days of frost with fingers blue
take the thistle from your shoe
in tunnels from lightning hide
blanket your sister from the sky
remember the preacher says
they are sparks from heaven`s lathe

dragonflies on days of sun
try to make their four engine hum
slip your dance between my rhymes
hear crickets sing in daddy`s mind
remember arms become wings
when there are no apron strings

make for me a crown of daisy chains
shake your rattle round the once and future king
take me where my heart still resides
our birds forever fly
we`ll climb the hill to Swallows Rise

days of rust and falling gold
save our secret in the old oak knoll
bluebell scythe throw on the fire
swallows tremble wait on the wire
remember us and be brave
you are sparks from heaven`s lathe

make for me a crown of daisy chains
shake your rattle round the once and future king
take me where my heart still resides
our birds forever fly
we`ll climb the hill to Swallows Rise

© Robert Cordrey Sept.2017

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Hi Robert,

What a truly beautiful pop-folk song. Brilliant lyric and Janet's voice is the perfect addition. The backing tracks and their mix is as good as it gets.

This is a totally delightful listen. COngrats you and all involved. Again ... gorgeous song.

Alan


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Robert,

Great job on this - in all regards.

An interesting write - as your songs so often are... poetry... excellent prosody throughout... although I do not understand all the references, they fall on my ear well - and will likely reveal their meaning in time.

Excellent instrumentation. One of your best. Just enough. Not too much. Allows the lyric/vocals to shine.

The vocals are super. You are at your best here. Like a Rod McKuen record. Janice's harmonies are perfectly supportive (and never "taking the spotlight") - perfect.

This is Poetic Music at it's best.

fj

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Good on every level. Good write, vocals are spot on, nice choice of instruments too; that banjo sits in the mix perfectly.

Loved it!

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Very cool song Robert. I absolutely love your vocal on this song. Janice's harmonies were so gentle and complimentary to your vocal. Lyrics was excellent. Banjo in the back was very cool. This has to be my favorite of all your songs. Well done


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What a tune! You guys nailed this. The vocals are on point, and it just sounds very professionally arranged and written. I honestly wouldn't change a thing here. The lyrics paint a vivid picture as well.

Great work, and thanks so much for sharing!


Cheers,
Deryk
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You always made very nice song; I think you have outdone yourself this time.

I loved melody so much in this song. Very nice.

Janice remember me some "Joan Baez" second vocal in her duets with Bob Dylan.

Sergio



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Originally Posted By: Al-David
Hi Robert,

What a truly beautiful pop-folk song. Brilliant lyric and Janet's voice is the perfect addition. The backing tracks and their mix is as good as it gets.

This is a totally delightful listen. COngrats you and all involved. Again ... gorgeous song.

Alan


Alan,
Thanks very much for this;I often do lots of revision on the lyrics, but this one was quick so I`m glad you liked them.
I knew, of course that Janice would, sing very close to the lead and she nailed it in one take.

Robert

Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

Great job on this - in all regards.

An interesting write - as your songs so often are... poetry... excellent prosody throughout... although I do not understand all the references, they fall on my ear well - and will likely reveal their meaning in time.

Excellent instrumentation. One of your best. Just enough. Not too much. Allows the lyric/vocals to shine.

The vocals are super. You are at your best here. Like a Rod McKuen record. Janice's harmonies are perfectly supportive (and never "taking the spotlight") - perfect.

This is Poetic Music at it's best.

fj



Thank you, Floyd!
My request to Bud and Janice was that the harmony be close to duet levels ( well the song is about brothers & sisters) and am very happy with the result.
There is one very "English" reference in the lyrics - The Once And Future King is a book about King Arthur probably not well known in the US ... our games were as often Knights and Damsels as Cowboys and Indians.

Robert

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Hi, Robert !:))


Wonderful tune and so
also the duet with Janice !
Superb co-op leaves nothing
else to wish for !!!:))

Cheers
Dani

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I see your childhood, I see mine

great journey

take me where my heart still resides

different places but still the same

we were so lucky to have a childhood where you played

outside and went at it as hard as possible until you were

called in for dinner, not slaves to phones and xbox.

great melody and nice vocals and harmonies

enjoyed this a lot Robert

Kenny

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Originally Posted By: Al-David
Hi Robert,

What a truly beautiful pop-folk song. Brilliant lyric and Janet's voice is the perfect addition. The backing tracks and their mix is as good as it gets.

This is a totally delightful listen. COngrats you and all involved. Again ... gorgeous song.

Alan


Thank you Alan. I enjoyed learning and singing the part.

Janice


Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

Great job on this - in all regards.

An interesting write - as your songs so often are... poetry... excellent prosody throughout... although I do not understand all the references, they fall on my ear well - and will likely reveal their meaning in time.

Excellent instrumentation. One of your best. Just enough. Not too much. Allows the lyric/vocals to shine.

The vocals are super. You are at your best here. Like a Rod McKuen record. Janice's harmonies are perfectly supportive (and never "taking the spotlight") - perfect.

This is Poetic Music at it's best.

fj



Thanks floyd! Bud always says "you've never had footlights in your eyes" smile

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Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Good on every level. Good write, vocals are spot on, nice choice of instruments too; that banjo sits in the mix perfectly.

Loved it!


Thank you, Dave!
Getting the banjo in the right place in the mix was a bit tricky...luckily Bud`s instincts are flawless in this genre.

Robert

Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very cool song Robert. I absolutely love your vocal on this song. Janice's harmonies were so gentle and complimentary to your vocal. Lyrics was excellent. Banjo in the back was very cool. This has to be my favorite of all your songs. Well done


Scott,
Thanks for your kind comments.
This was a very comfortable tune to sing for me - one of a short list of my own favourites I`d be ok about singing live.
Yes, Janice`s harmony is a wonder - "glued on " as I said when adding it to the track.

Robert

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Hello, Robert

Really beautiful pop-folk song!
Harmonies with Janice remind me of Peter, Paul and Mary a little bit.
A faint discord tone of the banjo arpeggio and drums entering from the middle are good spices for this song.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

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Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
What a tune! You guys nailed this. The vocals are on point, and it just sounds very professionally arranged and written. I honestly wouldn't change a thing here. The lyrics paint a vivid picture as well.

Great work, and thanks so much for sharing!


Deryk,
Thanks for your listen and comments. I have to give kudos to the PG Music style makers here- I didn`t feel the need to change anything in this one!

Robert

Originally Posted By: Sergio Guarneri

You always made very nice song; I think you have outdone yourself this time.

I loved melody so much in this song. Very nice.

Janice remember me some "Joan Baez" second vocal in her duets with Bob Dylan.

Sergio



That`s very kind, Sergio - I`m happy you enjoyed our " almost duet".
Robert

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Hi, Robert !:))


Wonderful tune and so
also the duet with Janice !
Superb co-op leaves nothing
else to wish for !!!:))

Cheers
Dani


Thank you, Dani!

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Originally Posted By: 44kfl
I see your childhood, I see mine

great journey

take me where my heart still resides

different places but still the same

we were so lucky to have a childhood where you played

outside and went at it as hard as possible until you were

called in for dinner, not slaves to phones and xbox.

great melody and nice vocals and harmonies

enjoyed this a lot Robert

Kenny


Kenny,
I really appreciate your comments!
Its good to hear you say this song connected on that level.
Yeah, those times of hardly any toys but loads of freedom for kids seem to be long gone... lord knows I can see what`s lost, but whatever is gained by filling days with screen time escapes me.

Robert

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What a beautiful song. I can feel the nostalgia in this one, and the lyrics are almost a little abstract in an amazing sort of way. I really like this one. Great job you guys!


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Wonderful writing good tune evocative lyrics - enjoyed the video - your's and Janice's vocals (which are as usual superb) are very complimentary.
Excellent work by all involved.

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Originally Posted By: animarorecords
Hello, Robert

Really beautiful pop-folk song!
Harmonies with Janice remind me of Peter, Paul and Mary a little bit.
A faint discord tone of the banjo arpeggio and drums entering from the middle are good spices for this song.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi


Hi Shigeki,
Thank you for your listen and comments.
I thought holding the banjo back at the start gave the song a lift when it came in too and the drums are a bit surprising in a Bluegrass style.
I`m glad you enjoyed this.

Robert

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Attracted by the sweet title I found a beautiful and wistful
trip back to early childhood. Most enjoyable.
Very professional on all levels.
Well done to all concerned. Cheers.

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The lyrics sound like something Don McLean would write.
And that puts in in very good company.
Love the support vocals.
Very thoughtful write.
Thanks for sharing.
Rob

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