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Hi All.

Here is a song that I wrote during February but never got round to posting to the forum.

I recently sent the BIAB RealTracks and the dry vocal recordings to my producer (Ogi Feel the Beat) who lives in Serbia and this is what he did with it.

THE DAY YOU WENT AWAY

The song is hosted on the new hosting site called Musicoin that you may have heard of being discussed on the Off-Topic forum. This is a revolutionary new hosting site where musicians are directly remunerated each time their song is streamed.

I am very positive about this prospects of this site because my view is that we all need somewhere to "put" our music so that it can be heard and here is a good place as any (but may be better because of the fact that we get rewarded for our creative efforts, even if it is only a few cents!).

I think it is like any thing else where you only get out what you put in. So to get results you need to participate in the community (they have quite a lively forum as well as competitions, artist and song of the week, remix challenges etc).

If anybody is interested in signing up to Muscoin I would appreciate it if you would use my referral link.

SIGN UP TO Musicoin

In writing this song I tried to imagine what the next morning would be like if my partner left me (although "how" he leaves me is up to the listener's interpretation:)

I wont answer the cell phone ringing
The dishes lie dirty in the sink
the dog is sleeping on your side of the bed
I cant even clear my mind to think

I wont throw out your toothbrush in the bathroom
There's even some old clothes in a case
The grass is growing high outside our bedroom door
Theres never any laughter in this place

I feel so shattered, falling into grief
I feel so shaken, falling apart

It was the morning
when you went away
autumn leaves falling
when you went away
I remember everything clear as the day
the day you went away

I wont clean the wine stains on the carpet
I dont have to make the dinner anymore
The cat is walking round wondering what he lost
he'll go back to the way he was before

I feel so broken, floating into grief
I feel so beaten, falling apart

It was the morning
when you went away
autumn leaves falling
when you went away
I remember everything clear as the day
the day you went away


The realtracks used are:
RealTracks in style: 366:Bass, Electric, Country Ev 065
RealTracks in style: 891:Piano, Acoustic, Solo-Accompaniment PopLiverpool Ev 065
RealTracks in style: 870:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm ModernRnBRockWarmQuarters Ev 065
RealDrums in style: NashvilleBrushesBalladPushEv16: a: Sidestick, Brushes b: Brushes
RT891:Piano, Acoustic, Solo-Accompaniment PopLiverpool Ev 06

Comments are always much appreciated.

Very pretty song Joanne. Super vocal loved the backtrack and lyric.

Hi, Jo !

I think this is one
of your absolute best
if not even the best !

Everything works so
well here ! I like
it when you sing
in voices with yourself !
Sounded absolutely
superb !

Cheers
Dani

Hi Joanne,
Lovely Vocal as usual,effortless and its very beautiful on the ear .Liked the line "floating into grief" .The Liverpool piano is a very pretty realtrack I think and a good choice.I will definitely look at musicoin and sign up through ur link when I get how it works .Great Job all round wishing you success with the song Hugh

Joanne

Loved the slow build and arrangement. Superb song - wonderful vocal and lyric.
Really great songwriting.

Peter

Hello, Joanne

I thought it was a wonderful folky tune, and that your vocals' main character was demonstrated very well.
Melody seems to come to mind naturally when reading your English lyrics.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Beautiful Joanne... Perfect mix and vocal.

Loved it!

Bob

Very nice work! It’s the first of your tunes that I’ve had the opportunity to listen to, and I look forward to hearing more. Vocal, arrangement, and overall tone of the song perfectly aligned. Good luck with this one!

Powerful and beautiful, song about losing someone special. Well done Joanne,

I have yet to get a song to play from this site. An album pops out of the cover and spins but no sound.

J&B

Joanne,
This is moving and lovely- among the best I`ve heard from you.A showcase for your voice... with some irresistible ache!
The production is top notch.
Thanks for the recommendation of the new site- will have a look.

Robert

Beautiful lyrics perfectly expressed in a lovely melody, Joanne. I love the vocal harmonies and the overall arrangement. Very nice indeed.


John

Joanne, this is such a nice song! A great write and your vocal is really strong/superb! Your harmony parts are perfect to my ear! Thanks, Torrey

Lovely song Joanne as always. Great clean production.Rob

Wow - you nailed this one! And your vocals are absolutely incredible here. Super powerful, and super impactful. The production is crystal clear too. This is the kind of tune I'd imagine hearing on the radio and it not sounding out of place one bit.

Great job, and thanks for sharing!

Joanne, the lengthy pauses in the delivery create great wonderful anticipation.

This is a great write all of the way through. The voice overlay reinforces dimension, and the build is just ever so subtle that it slots in perfectly with this excellent ballad.

Definitely one of your best, no question.

excellent song. Your best of ever.
super vocal as usual a great feeling in the song.

Really well done.

Sergio

Hi Joanne.

Tried several times but like J&B it won't play for me.
My PC plays all other sites I have tried.
Do i need to sign up to listen or something?
(not interested in signing up).
Also where does the money come from?
Is it just created out of thin air?

Cheers.

Joanne,

Nicely done, really like the piano in this one . . . haunting and sad, all accentuated by the soulful lyrics. Great harmonies on this as well, used wisely and effectively. Enjoyed my listen.

All the best,

Deej

It took multiple clicks before the song played.

It's a lovely song, good write, well sung.

The mix isn't quite my cup of tea, but that's probably just me. The drum seems out of place - it seems "disembodied" and unreal. I've probably heard the prior mix, and so I've already been spoiled.

I love the Liverpool piano, but the way it jumps registers drives me batty - I really wish there were MIDI versions of all these piano tracks, because it would be so easy to fix in a MIDI editor. I've given up on being able to use some of those RealTrack pianos because of that. Which is a shame, because they're so nice. Again, maybe this is only a problem for me.

But no matter what (minor) complaints I have about the mix - lovely song, good write, well sung!