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Sometimes darkness is all you find...


NOTHIN'S WORKIN' YET

to call it a martini throw an olive in
truth be told it ain't nothing more than gin
3 or 4 to ease just where i been
but who's countin'

i weren't too much more than a step away
from giving in to giving up, calling it a day
jesus don't seem to hear a thing i say
so i stopped talking to him
   
   tried everything that I can think
   drama and drugs and the devil's drink
   any recipe to make me forget
   nothin's workin' yet

blow a little smoke, just one more thing
trying to soften this shattered dream
my heart locked in an endless scream
how much more can it endure

spent a little time with this girl i know
money changing hands no need to take it slow
if she cared at all, she didn't let it show
so i stopped talking to her
   
   tried everything that I can think
   drama and drugs, the devil's drink
   any recipe to make me forget
   nothin's workin' yet
   nothin's workin' yet
   nothin's workin' yet





Well... I did manage to find the BAND I was looking for...

RealTracks in style: ~700:Bass, Electric, PopHalfNotesPush Ev 085
RealTracks in style: 1945:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm GroovinFolk Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 3059:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm Muted16thsFintan Ev16 080
RealTracks in song: 2667:Pedal Steel, Background DreamySingleNote Ev 075
RealDrums in Song: BossaBrushesPerc^1-a:Congas, No Kit , b:Congas, Shaker, Triangle, No Kit



Thanks for listening.
And for any comments.

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Hi Floyd

Sometimes something comes along that suits a jaded state of mind. Nothing too dramatic.
Just Hmmmmm.
Like everything about it.

Cheers.

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floyd

Nothin' except the song which works on all levels. A gorgeous mix, and subtle vocal to go along with a wonderfully crafted lyric.

All class.

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Dear Mr. Jane,

Thank you for submitting your song to our Nashville evaluation service.

First, you say that the song is called Nothing's Working Yet, but yet you start by talking about a martini made of gin. Why didn't you call the song Martini? You are not helping the listener find the hook. Also, no one knows what gin is. Is that a type of card game?

To make matters worse, you say Jesus is not listening to you so you stopped talking to him. Most people would say that if you get caught talking out loud to Jesus, you are crazy and need to be locked up. But you could put that in the bridge with your card game. Please listen to the radio more. They will show you how.

And what is all this about the devil's drink being a recipe? No one has ever seen a devil's drink in a recipe book Mr. Jane. How do you expect the listener to know what is going on?

Kidding!!!!!!!!

Loved this song. One of my favorites.

I just had to go on a rampage there. Sorry. Nashville writers know why.

But don't give up on Jesus quite yet. He may be the only one around to help when the world finally DOES make you lose your mind.

Just sayin'.

smile

Great song.

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Hey there floyd jane, great work on this! The arrangement is wonderful to the ears and the instruments are layered nicely. The guitar sure howls! Keep it up!


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Oh, I like this!

Love the stripped down arrangement, you had me right from the start with those two acoustic guitars playing off each other, works really well. The subtle use of the pedal steel and that Bossa Percussion is perfect.

Love the vocal, especially when you bring the harmonies in for the second verse.

Very nice, floyd!

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Another well produced song, Clean, Strong recording and the Floyd feeling, makes this flow in style.

What was the inspiration for the lyrics ?.

Thanks.


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Another super tune Floyd. I also loved the laid back feel of the song. Your vocal was very special on this song. I to loved how the two guitars fit together very cool. Well done Floyd..


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Floyd,

I love this... My favorite "Floyd song" to date. The instrumentation is wonderful, as is the overall write. Your understated vocal really brings it all home.

Just the best...

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Hello Floyd,

When your mind is still happily treading the terrific journey this song takes the listener on, it's hard to concentrate in order to write/say something about it. But I'll try.

The two acoustics play off each other so nicely. And dang, that percussion is the perfect fit. Music-wise and lyric-wise, the simplicity of this song is actually the driving force. It has everything it needs and not a single thing it doesn't. The old theory - I'm sure you're familiar with it - is throw in everything that might fit and then keep taking things away until there's nothing more to take away that hurts the essence of the song. That's what this song is - a journey in listening pleasure and an example of how to craft a terrific song. I think ya got this songwritin' thing down pretty good - well, maybe better than pretty good!

A tip of the sombrero to a superb craftsman.

Alan

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Your lyrics are poetry, and that ain't hyperbole. Loved the song. I'll be listening to it again and again.

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Originally Posted By: David Snyder

Dear Mr. Jane,

Thank you for submitting your song to our Nashville evaluation service.

First, you say that the song is called Nothing's Working Yet, but yet you start by talking about a martini made of gin. Why didn't you call the song Martini? You are not helping the listener find the hook. Also, no one knows what gin is. Is that a type of card game?

To make matters worse, you say Jesus is not listening to you so you stopped talking to him. Most people would say that if you get caught talking out loud to Jesus, you are crazy and need to be locked up. But you could put that in the bridge with your card game. Please listen to the radio more. They will show you how.

And what is all this about the devil's drink being a recipe? No one has ever seen a devil's drink in a recipe book Mr. Jane. How do you expect the listener to know what is going on?

Kidding!!!!!!!!

Loved this song. One of my favorites.

I just had to go on a rampage there. Sorry. Nashville writers know why.

But don't give up on Jesus quite yet. He may be the only one around to help when the world finally DOES make you lose your mind.

Just sayin'.

smile

Great song.


Now that right there is funny if it wasn't true. One of the main reasons I stopped sending songs to NSAI. David, I thought you had hacked my NSAI expired account. That had me going for a minute..... thought I was having a flashback to one of my reviews.

Anyway....


Hey, a great song that kinda grew on me as I was listening. Started out ... this is interesting.... then as it went on, I was a fan by the end. That's called drawing them in and converting them in 3 minutes.

You did a fine job as always on the song.


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Now Herb, I must make it perfectly clear that this was a harmless little silly joke that is kind of an inside joke between me and Floyd, and if I WASN'T joking, then I clearly would be talking about:

Dirty Dick's Nashville Crab Shack and Song Evaluation and Demo Services.

If I WASN'T joking--which, I am, just to be clear, good dear buddy and friend.

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Floyd,

Wow! Understated and all the more real for that... these lyrics are so well crafted.
Everything fits on the production ( been wanting to use that muted acoustic guitar track -it sounds great the way you paired & panned it here).
What songwriting is all about!

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AND THE HITS JUST KEEP ON COMIN'!!!. Mr. Jane another winner. Love the lyrics as they usually grab my attention first. Good country vibe.

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love it!

This song just showcases how much you've got this down,

This thing that we're all drawn or compelled to try and do

on this forum.

Damned near perfect recording, the mix, the vocals, writing, and the heart,

The sentiment, the mood, the feeling in this is conveyed in that subtle

way that only an artist can achieve.

I'm a fan

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Hi Floyd

Sometimes something comes along that suits a jaded state of mind. Nothing too dramatic.
Just Hmmmmm.
Like everything about it.

Cheers.


Richard - it is nice to see you drop by. Glad you liked this one. (you need to be posting some songs!)

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What a moving refelction on life's downs. Would I be out of line to quote the old saying about "a hair of the dog that bit me,"?
Very well crafted recording.
On another serious side, my associates and I are right now discussing the long term consequences of drug and alcohol abuse. The first two lines of your song are relevent to something called "rebranding."
Carry on, Floyd. Always a pleasure.

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A well written & produced song... I enjoyed it.


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You surely have the ability to find the right sound to convey the message. The muted acoustic and the single string atmospheric steel used sparingly are two good examples of the less is more approach used here. What struck me besides the well written lyrics "my heart locked in an endless scream" was the understated vocal. Perfect harmonies and mix that is executed with a pro touch. Thankfully for all of us you never run out of interesting things to say. Another amazing composition, Tom

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