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The Bitter Taste Of Red

Beginning 20 years ago with a something a friend said about her childhood and since then going in different directions with how to write a song about family violence, I`m almost sure this is captures the feeling I had at the time.
Listens appreciated and comments welcome.


Style is _MILESIX.STY (Mile Six Slow Even-16 Americana)

RealTracks in style: 2877:Bass, Acoustic, AmericanaSlow16thsByron Ev16 060
RealTracks in song: 2878:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm AmericanaSlow16thsBrent Ev16 060
RealTracks in style: 1596:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Pop16ths Ev16 065
RealTracks in song RT3058 Acoustic guitar
RealDrums in style: AmericanaRoots16th^01-a:Toms, b:Snare



The Bitter Taste Of Red


can you live another life
erase the senses of the heart
make a blessing from a curse
change the arc of a star


all the rainbow ribbons
momma fastened through her hair
Jenny keeps with daddy`s laugh
like braids through despair
still feels her friend`s eyes
they never lingered or traced
eyes that saw past
the mark upon her face

the cool touch of blue
cool touch of blue
that`s how she learnt
the cool touch of blue

fell into a fire
when she was born into this world
Jenny turned herself to water
like a helpful little girl
one spark in the silence
between a woman and a man
picked up her bucket
into the flames she ran

the bitter taste of red
bitter taste of red
that`s how she learnt
the bitter taste of red

heaven swirled with hell
by strangers she was raised
I`m from a nuclear family
Jenny said but she kept safe
all the rainbow ribbons
momma fastened through her hair
with daddy`s laugh in a treasure box
called can`t go back there

the healing sound of time
healing sound of time
that`s how she learnt
the healing sound of time


the bitter taste of red
bitter taste of red
that`s how she learnt
the bitter taste of red


© Robert Cordrey Oct. 2018

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Beautiful song Robert. Such a sad story. You vocal was just perfect for the song. Excellent choice of instruments for the song. Production was first class. Well done


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Man, what a powerful song! So well written ... you are a true wordsmith, Robert.

Great melody, and possibly your best vocal to date, love the harmonies!

My new favorite song from you, well done!

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Robert,

A very powerful, emotion-packed song.

The change at each chorus is exceptional.

Awesome use of the BIAB Americana instruments.

Very well done.


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That's a hard subject to write about but you've done it nicely. Love the harmonies. Sounds very lonesome.


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Robert,

This is a great folk song... I love the storytelling and delivery. The mix and instrumentation is perfect and the build towards the middle with the whole band is really special - drives it home.

Very much enjoyed and going back for another listen.

Bob

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Wow, you are really in shape here!
Mysterious, dynamic, creative and a distinct Neil Young, Roy Orbison feel to it.

GREAT WORK!

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Very nice, beautiful and sad song. I like your voice which compliment the lyrics perfectly.
Very well done!

Thanks for sharing!
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The double vocal of the 1st stanza was off putting but that worry dissipated a few seconds later when the verse began.
The harmony vocal in the chorus is more subtle, more accurately matched as a double and more controlled.
A very really good essay of a difficult subject.
Terrific stuff.


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Dave,
That`s very supportive- sometimes sitting on things you`ve written and put down unfinished many times you wonder if the plot`s been lost.
I`m so glad you liked this one... and really I only got into writing lyrics because I knew I`d never be the guitarist I heard in my head!

Originally Posted By: Scott C
Beautiful song Robert. Such a sad story. You vocal was just perfect for the song. Excellent choice of instruments for the song. Production was first class. Well done


Thank you, Scott...the next one has to go somewhere more fun!

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Robert,

A very powerful, emotion-packed song.

The change at each chorus is exceptional.

Awesome use of the BIAB Americana instruments.

Very well done.


fj


Thanks for the positives.I do like the feeling of those Americana tracks.

Robert

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Hello, "Robertkc"...

Once again, in my experience of listening to your songs, you write some damn-near pure poetry that alternately reveals and obscures its meanings like a badly injured memory that loses, and then finds, finds and loses little bits and pieces of scenes from fateful experiences that it doesn't want to remember.

"The Bitter Taste of Red" is impressionistic in its impact, helped along by a musical arrangement that's so intimate and stripped-down that what's left is powerful precisely because of its austerity.

This is a very arresting production, lyrically and musically.

Meditating on it,

LOREN


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Robert

Beautifully and sensitively done. A fine vocal, strong and poetic lyrics and a nice choice of band.
Really very impressive.

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Robert,

Beautiful, poignant and poetic, both musically and lyrically.

I really enjoyed this.

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Dark but beautiful...

Shades of Simon and Garfunkel... Nicely done!


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Robert that was fantastic! What a lyric to go with the PERFECT music bed! One of your best IMHO! Thanks, T




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Originally Posted By: Samuel Davis
That's a hard subject to write about but you've done it nicely. Love the harmonies. Sounds very lonesome.


Thank you!

Originally Posted By: rsdean
Robert,

This is a great folk song... I love the storytelling and delivery. The mix and instrumentation is perfect and the build towards the middle with the whole band is really special - drives it home.

Very much enjoyed and going back for another listen.

Bob


Bob,
Its good to hear I got that arrangement right- listening to your productions might be having an influence! Thanks for your comments.

Originally Posted By: RnAM
Wow, you are really in shape here!
Mysterious, dynamic, creative and a distinct Neil Young, Roy Orbison feel to it.

GREAT WORK!

Rob and Anne-Marie


Rob & Anne-Marie,
That`s a great endorsement - I`m glad you enjoyed this.

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
Very nice, beautiful and sad song. I like your voice which compliment the lyrics perfectly.
Very well done!

Thanks for sharing!
Will


Will,
Thanks for listening and commenting.

Originally Posted By: rayc
The double vocal of the 1st stanza was off putting but that worry dissipated a few seconds later when the verse began.
The harmony vocal in the chorus is more subtle, more accurately matched as a double and more controlled.
A very really good essay of a difficult subject.
Terrific stuff.


I knew that choice to make the harmony vocal the lead for the opening might not work for all tastes - I like the way it begins the song with a vulnerable feel ( the child`s voice), but I`ll probably revisit the balance later.
Good and helpful comments - thank you!

Robert

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Very powerful Robert!! Very dark! Music creates the perfect mood. Good arrangement and vocal. Well done!! Take care. Greg

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Excellent song Robert. I figured to myself a final as Dire Strait's "Brothers in Arm" and a more long fading out ending.

Surely one of your best.

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Originally Posted By: Jim
Dark but beautiful...

Shades of Simon and Garfunkel... Nicely done!


I think Jim summed it up pretty good with just a few words. I fully agree with the S & G analogy. Excellent work on this. You do these sad folk songs so dang good! Excellent!

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Originally Posted By: bluage
Hello, "Robertkc"...

Once again, in my experience of listening to your songs, you write some damn-near pure poetry that alternately reveals and obscures its meanings like a badly injured memory that loses, and then finds, finds and loses little bits and pieces of scenes from fateful experiences that it doesn't want to remember.

"The Bitter Taste of Red" is impressionistic in its impact, helped along by a musical arrangement that's so intimate and stripped-down that what's left is powerful precisely because of its austerity.

This is a very arresting production, lyrically and musically.

Meditating on it,

LOREN



Loren,
How to write a song about family violence avoiding cliche`s and showing rather than telling? It had to be "impressionistic" as you say.
Once again your review is most interesting and supportive because I know you really listened.
Thank you!

Robert


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Robert

Beautifully and sensitively done. A fine vocal, strong and poetic lyrics and a nice choice of band.
Really very impressive.

Peter


Thank you Peter!

Originally Posted By: David Snyder

Robert,

Beautiful, poignant and poetic, both musically and lyrically.

I really enjoyed this.



David,
Thanks for your listen and positive comments.

Originally Posted By: Jim
Dark but beautiful...

Shades of Simon and Garfunkel... Nicely done!


Thanks for that, Jim

Originally Posted By: Torrey Bliss
Robert that was fantastic! What a lyric to go with the PERFECT music bed! One of your best IMHO! Thanks, T


I`m happy you liked this Torrey!

Robert

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