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Hi everyone, Here is my 'contribute' for september. https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130/gonna-be-lonely
This song I made in januari 2018, long before I participated in this forum. I didn't dare to at that time. I couldn't mix or master, and the song sounded very harsh. Now I think I have learned more, so dare more. This song is based on the style Merfolk, the key is C and the tempo is 100. I added an funky electric guitar and 2690 as an electric sologuitar. I did the harmony with VoiceLive3 from TC Helicon. The lyrics are a fantasy. I am exaggerating a bit about relationproblems. I more liked the melody and the singing. I hope you like it. Let me know, Hans Lyrics: Gonna be lonely(c) HwBerkhout, jan. 2018/ 2019 Oh, lonely me You found out this evening what happened between our silky sheets I had filthy feet You don't have to ask me how I know Your eyes have that piercing, scary light It better have a lonely night But it's aching, you never told me You had secrets of your own, I'd see Oh, it's gonna be a lonely night For you and for me What to do now? Who's got to go? Our hands are free So it ain't me Before you leave here I must tell you Maybe you won't understand But this was not planned Oh, it's so cold now It started raining The stars don't shine so bright Ah, it's gonna be a lonely night I felt sorry, what I have done? Can we mend what we cannot see? Ah, it's gonna be a lonely night For you and me I admit, about you I had my doubts too But don't make that much fuzz That's really not us Can't we talk it over and end like friends? Maybe there remains one tiny light Or we gonna have a lonely night Don't leave tomorrow, stay some more time Get your love back out of that old tree Or it's gonna be a lonely night For you and for me We have to do some talking Don't whist anyway But please let me stay... Alright, I pack my things And I go someplace else I will look for what I won't find Because you stay on my mind Oh, let's talk it over and see what is left Or did our love really died? Then there gonna be a lonely night I leave tomorrow, why should I stay? We can't go back, and that's so true Ah, another lonely night For me and for you Ah, another lonely night for me and for you
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The writing and arrangement are solid.
I vacillate between enjoying and disliking the vocal effects you've used.
It's one of those things.
As a demo of a cool song it works a treat any way.
The only real quibble would be that in my head I sing
"For you and for me" with the same notes but different phrasing.
You've succeeded in driving me nuts with your song - I enjoyed it too!
Cheers
rayc
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Hans,
A cool sounding song. The BAND is cookin'... nicely mixed.
The vocals are nice. During the chorus when there are multiple vocal tracks it gets a bit loud, but they sound cool (perhaps the group could be backed off a bit).
A good listen.
fj
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Hans,
I enjoyed your rocking song. I like your vocals- energetic, good phrasing and a bit raspy ( reminds me of John Hiatt). I agree that backing off the chorus harmonies would reduce the harsh edge there.
Robert
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Hans, Looks like you had fun with it! Very catchy tune! Strong vocals. Interesting phrasing and arrangement. Since, I believe you have strong nerves, here is an opinion. The vocals and arrangement do have different feel to them. I wish there would be more "common" tonal balance between them. You like vocals on HF (I have that issue too  ) but arrangement has a more balanced EQ feel, so the vocals to my ear stand out a bit more than comfort level. Still, song is powerful and done very tastefully. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing! Misha.
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We like the vocal effects and the overall sound.
Everything holds together well when cranked up on our monitors.
Robert said: "I reminds me of John Hiatt"
Good point! We have listened to him over the years and there is a similarity...a good thing!
This is a fine rocker that we enjoyed!
J&B
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Hi Ray, Floyd, Robert, Misha, Janice and Bud,
I thought it would be some sort of Popsong, not a Rocker. But I think you are more right than I. feels strange, me being a rocker!
Actually I had the BeeGees in mind. Not their high voices but the way they arrange their songs. i can say here (just for us) I was a fan of them and could sing that high, once...
But I like a lot of music/styles. and one of my sons had compared me with John Hiatt. I still have to get used to it, when you come from far (BG's).
And i heard what you said about my group. Back off! I told them to do so, cause Floyd said so, as did Ray, Robert, Misha. Only Janicew and Bud could stand it, because their monitors hold even when cranked up to their max.!
But Ray was teasing me with his post. I had to use google-Translate for nearly every sentence he wrote. The nicest part was I drove him nuts!!! I thought he was doing that to me with his language.
But thanks everyone for giving me tips and instructions.
I made some adjustments and did that backoff request. Maybe it's somewhat better now.
I appreciate it very much,
Hans
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Hans,
This is a great rock song... Good song, vocal and mix. I thoroughly enjoyed this one!
Bob
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The vocal sounds a little loud at times, but otherwise the song is pretty solid. Really great job!
Cheers,
Ember
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Excellent tune Hans. Super vocal. Loved the guitar. Well done
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Good song, Hans!
I especially like those layered vocals, very effective.
Enjoyed the listen!
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Wow - you did a number on this one! The arrangement is excellent and your vocals are stunning. The harmonies on the chorus soar, and I really thought the instrumentation was well blended, personally. Thanks for sharing
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Very catchy chorus, those backing vocals make it really powerful. The solo guitar hides the vocals during verses, maybe you could pan it differently? The selected band works very well with the lyrical message and your strong voice, although I was also thinking how Neil Young and his simple arrangement would work.
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I liked it for the most part. It felt like there was always a guitar, background vocal, or something else competing with the lead vocal. Otherwise, a lot to like here.
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Hans
A nice rocking number, with a good sounding band. Some good mixing advice in the posts.
Nice work.
Peter
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Hi Bob, Ember, Scott, Dave, Deryk, Jannsan, Tunemonger and Peter,
At first, thanks for listening to the song and secondly the remarks, tips and advises.
I consider this forum to be a place to interact and learn. So never be shy when you judge my songs. But do it with a friendly tone, otherwise I'm of my track for some days. And you all succeeded to do that (that tone).
Bob, Scott and Dave and Deryk, thanks you liked the song. Made me smile for a day now!
Ember, you mentioned those vocals come in a bit too loud. I changed that, because some others said the same and were right. Maybe I was too hasty showing you this song.
That is also the case with the mixing between instruments and vocals as Jannesan, Tunemonger and Peter meant. Tunemonger was using the word 'competing' and I found out he was right. So I remixed the song on those aspects. The electric guitar softer and more to the left, like the sologuitar on certain aspects. And I had to listen where to place the vocals. All the backgroundvocals are now moved to the right. At first I had them spread out left and right for a 'wide' effect.
And I changed the label 'Pop' into 'Rock', although I was convinced this song was not at all a Rocksong...
Hans
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Enjoyable listen. The vocals parts with harmony have a very modern pop sound to them.
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Hi Hans,
This is a great listen! I love this groove heaps.
Your songwriting is excellent and your song-presentation is confident and very enjoyable to listen to. The arrangement shines. One of many things that really impressed me was how you managed to weave a solo guitar around vocals... that's no mean feet at all. It's something that I've very rarely managed to achieve but, as I listened to this arrangement, you made it sound super easy. You're a talented man.
From start to end, I was with you all the way!
All the best,
Noel
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Cool! To me, your vocal delivery reminds me a lot of David Byrne of Talking Heads. I really like the asymmetrical pattern you use. This definitely goes in the "enjoyed" category for me!
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Great sounding rock ballad!! You really have that Lennon vibe in your vocals, which I love!! Great job on this one!! Take care. Greg
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