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My Millennial Masterpiece

This time a simple pop song about writing a perfect pop song smile Most likely it's not a perfect masterpiece, but maybe there is a hidden message how to write such thing wink To keep the length close to 3 minutes, there are no solos.

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Lyrics:

Sometimes I am trying just too hard
to create pure perfect art
even then when I am making love
mere technique
won't serve my sweetheart.

For many years I've been trying to write
my millennial masterpiece,
a tale to touch and delight
asking myself is perfection just a dream
or a flush of a swift gleam?

Sometimes I am trying by all means
to please the critics appetite
I can decorate the Christmas tree
full of frills
so it's no more in sight.

For many years...

Sometimes I am trying night and day
to resist all cute clichés
a euphemism after worn-out ones
I deny the truth
that love suits always.

For many years...

In the charming moment
of a three minute ride
my child awakens,
heavens open wide
clichéd or not,
still unique in my eyes
vulnerable, giving me
love with no ties.

For many years I've been trying to write
my millennial masterpiece,
a tale to touch and delight
asking myself is perfection just a dream
it's a flush of a gleam.

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Janne


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Janne,

This is really well done.

You tell this story well.

A wonderful melody. Beautiful AND catchy.

Excellent vocal. Your best, I think.

Really nice arrangement. Good instrument choices.
A very good mix.

Enjoyed this a lot.

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Hi Janne,

Good pop song!

Nice writing and melody.

Mix sounds good too, well done!

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Pondering perfection.
A cool narrative and a good melody.
Your vocals get better with every track.
Nice pop ballad arrangement to carry it too.


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Janne

Agree with floyd. Very nice melody and a very accomplished piece of writing.

Very well done.

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The vocals on this are really great. Thanks for sharing!


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Janne,
Funny and tasteful. Very cool arrangement. I am sure a Millennial would be very proud!
Thank you for sharing!

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Nice bit of pop music.

But only three minutes? Speak for yourself!

What? It's not an extended double-entendre? blush

Well, then. Fine song. Carry on. crazy


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You may call it a simple pop song but it's
certainly well written, performed and produced.

Really good vocal and you put together
a fine band.

It's got that important quality of a good pop song
in that it sticks with you.

Well done!

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Really pretty arrangement and melody Janne. I enjoyed listening very much.

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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
This is really well done.
You tell this story well.
A wonderful melody. Beautiful AND catchy.
Excellent vocal. Your best, I think.
Really nice arrangement. Good instrument choices.
A very good mix.
Enjoyed this a lot.
fj


Thanks Floyd, I really appreciate your very kind feedback smile I'm especially glad you liked my vocal.

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Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude

Good pop song!
Nice writing and melody.
Mix sounds good too, well done!


Thanks Dave for your kind words smile

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Originally Posted By: rayc
Pondering perfection.
A cool narrative and a good melody.
Your vocals get better with every track.
Nice pop ballad arrangement to carry it too.


Thanks Ray for your positive feedback smile I know I should practice much more to make my vocals even better, even two week break means many re-takes and more tweaking with Melodyne.

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Originally Posted By: PeterF
Agree with floyd. Very nice melody and a very accomplished piece of writing.
Very well done.
Peter


Thanks Peter for your kind feedback smile

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Originally Posted By: Ember - PG Music
The vocals on this are really great. Thanks for sharing!


Thanks Ember for your positive comment smile

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Originally Posted By: Rustyspoon#
Janne,
Funny and tasteful. Very cool arrangement. I am sure a Millennial would be very proud!
Thank you for sharing!
Misha.


Thanks Misha, I appreciate your listening and nice comment smile

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Janne,
I think there`s enough of the universal songwriter`s dilema in your personal struggle to make your Masterpiece song easy to relate to...and I like that image of over decorating the Christmas tree! No solo needed on this.
Your melody is a good pop contrast with the lyrics and I agree, your vocals are excellent here.


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Lyrics that any songwriter on this forum could probably relate to. Interesting, well-constructed chord progression and nice harmonies.


My music may not set the world on fire but if it causes a glow in just one person's heart, it has all been worthwhile smile
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Janne,

The melody is very catchy and beautiful.
The chord progression is very tricky but very smooth.
Both of them show your originality fully.
It is also very effective that the bridge melody appears at the end of the song.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

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Cool tune Janne. Enjoyed the lyric and vocal


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