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She Doesn't Fight Fair

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_HIGHWAY.STY. Highway Driving Country Rock
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Instruments: El.Bass, Ac.Piano, El.Guitar, Drums
RD: NashvilleEven8^5-a:Snare, HiHat , b:Snare, Ride :Brian Fullen
RT1417: Bass, Electric, RootsRock Ev 100 , Craig Young
RT2763: Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm CountryBluesRockMike Ev 110 , Mike Rojas
RT2635: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm CountryBluesRockHigh Ev 110 , Brent Mason

Multi-riffed Guitar, Slide, Background Easy Southern Ev 120 to fill out the backing tracks

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I like it!
The only thing I would change---not that you asked for my advice---is "don't" for "doesn't." It's one syllable instead of two and sounds more, well, country. (And the "o" in "don't" can be stretched out as long as you like.)

Good stuff!


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Tight!

Nice write, well performed, nice mix!

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Originally Posted By: Mark Rhodes
I like it!
The only thing I would change---not that you asked for my advice---is "don't" for "doesn't." It's one syllable instead of two and sounds more, well, country. (And the "o" in "don't" can be stretched out as long as you like.)

Good stuff!



Will definitley consider the change Mark! The only reason I do post on this fourm is to get constructive feedback; therfore, I REALLY appreciate your insight. I can send songs to my family when I want hollow praise. LOL

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Nice work Dewey! Got to say that's the first time I've seen a "mulligan" in a set of lyrics! I think this one has the best sound of what you've posted! The vocals are tops! same for the harmonies! Excellent work! Thanks, Torrey




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Nice harmonies and the main vocal is terrific...there is something a little strident or clipping in it but not badly.
The band carries the song well.
Don't chance doesn't to don't...there's nothing wrong with not dipping into cliche.
The narrative is good fun.
WELL DONE!


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Dewey, this is outstanding. Super groove and vocal. The lyrics were awesome as is the mix.

Two big thumbs up.

PS - how long have you know my wife wink grin


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Originally Posted By: MarioD
Dewey, this is outstanding. Super groove and vocal. The lyrics were awesome as is the mix.

Two big thumbs up.

PS - how long have you know my wife wink grin


LOL! Thanks for listening.

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Originally Posted By: rayc
Nice harmonies and the main vocal is terrific...there is something a little strident or clipping in it but not badly.


Can you explain what you mean by "...something a little strident or clipping..."?

I'm always looking to improve so I appreciate your input!!

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Man do I ever like that chorus. Very hooky. An the harmony is so tasty. Good work.

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Good day Ezekiel,

Thanks for listening. My family lives in the Lansing area (Mason, MI to be specific). I trust you spent some time enjoying sunsets on Lake Michigan, eh?

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Hi Dewey,

I agree with my colleagues you made a good song.
The lyrics have a nice perspective they deal with.
And the vocal are really good. Chafing a bit, but really nice.

There is one thing though, or more a feeling, about the song. It is dealing with a subject where you want to hear a bit of desperation in the singing, but also in the song itself. The energy stayed the same, where I was hoping it would rise. Like: more volume in the choruses, a louder beat etc, etc.
Of course, it is a matter of taste, but keep in mind she doesn't fight fair! So I need to hear how that feels.

Have a nice day,
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Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hi Dewey,

There is one thing though, or more a feeling, about the song. It is dealing with a subject where you want to hear a bit of desperation in the singing, but also in the song itself. The energy stayed the same, where I was hoping it would rise. Like: more volume in the choruses, a louder beat etc, etc.
Of course, it is a matter of taste, but keep in mind she doesn't fight fair! So I need to hear how that feels.

Have a nice day,
Hans



Great insight Hans! Thank you for putting yourself out there with constructive criticism. I will certainly re-think the production from the depseration perspective. Not sure I can do much about the vocals unless I hire someone (which I am too cheap to do)! LOL

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Good title. Really like the lively description of that woman, easy to imagine the shaking and stomping.
Enjoyed your vocals, nice vibrato. The band sounds very good, supporting well the nice chord progression. The chorus is really catchy.

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Thanks for listening Janne!

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Cool backtrack. Loved the vocal and harmonies. The slide was a really nice add. Well done


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Sounds rollicking good, nice vocals and the slide works well.

Enjoyable song.

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Originally Posted By: Dewey_MI
Good day Ezekiel,

Thanks for listening. My family lives in the Lansing area (Mason, MI to be specific). I trust you spent some time enjoying sunsets on Lake Michigan, eh?


Yes, beautiful sunsets. We try to get back once a year. I graduated from CMU, and my wife attended MSU.

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Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm


Yes, beautiful sunsets. We try to get back once a year. I graduated from CMU, and my wife attended MSU.


Very cool! I'm an academic specialist in the College of Vet Med at MSU.

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NSAI informed me yesterday that this song is being recognized as "One To Watch"! My twenty-first song to reach this status.

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