Hi Dewey,


Ok, if you're serious about wanting feedback I'll take a stab at this.

The portmanteau didn't bother me one bit but I think it could be implemented differently.

To give the song some really strong verse-chorus variation, I would stretch that part out, even the words tropi-caaaaaaaallllllllllll me...blah blah blah

I mean reeeaaaaally drag that out.

I actually think it could be a crowd pleaser too but with a different style.

The fact that you're singing about a tropical subject is crying out for more of a Jimmy Buffett type arrangement instead of Billy Ray Cyrus, that was the disconnect for me not the title or the lyrics.

I think if you had a more of a Jimmy Buffett type approach that was laid back and easy and less Billy Ray Cyrus it would be more comfortable and easy to get into, and then if you got into a chorus where tropi-caaaaall me (woo-hooo!) was really stretched out there might actually be a market for it because it could be a country or trop rock radio song. Troprock is really big right now actually, and this would work in that genre but that particular style you're using is kind of dated.

Also I assume that tropi-call was the username of the person on the dating site and so when you sing it you're making a reference back to her, and it's not a portmanteau per se, you're actually referencing her ID on the website.

So if that were done in a more Jimmy Buffett style I think that it would make people laugh and you could have some traction with this one.

Those are my thoughts since you asked it for serious feedback.

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