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Well, sometimes it is the simple things. I had another back of the cocktail napkin lyric song and I recorded it, and HATED IT. I was like, man, this horrible. Garbage can. No way to fix it. Then I went to sleep. When I woke up, an angel whispered in my ear: Don't do it in C. Just change it to the key A and you will be fine. So I did. Now I don't think it is quite so horrible anymore. Just a key change. Who would have known??? LOVE WITHOUT PAROLE By David Snyder https://soundcloud.com/david-snyder-gigs4/love-without-paroleV1 Yesterday we were eighteen, I can smell that summer rain I still miss your breathless kiss, and how your sweetness felt like pain And yeah, I remember you, and when I do, I feel in debt, but no regrets So how come you're the thing that hurts me the most when I look back why would a loving Universe make a heart that works like that CH I think you own some part of me and I can't buy it back I'm a hostage to your memory, why did you do that and there's some tiny hole inside my heart where you will always be and I'm doing love without parole, oh yeah And no one knows but you how much I loved you and no one knows but you what love without parole has done to me V2 They say the man upstairs, always has a plan But the way he makes our hearts, I just don’t understand One day the world is young, next day the world is old One day your heart’s on fire, next day it’s all gone cold CH I think you own some part of me and I can't buy it back I'm a hostage to your memory, why did you do that and there's some tiny hole inside my heart where you will always be and I'm doing love without parole, oh yeah And no one knows but you how much I loved you and no one knows but you what love without parole has done to me to me, oh oh this love without parole this love without parole is killing me All words and music copyright 2024 by David Snyder David Snyder: Vocals, instrumentation, arrangement, production, mixing and mastering RealTracks in style: 3404:Bass, Electric, LoungeFunkAlex Ev16 080 RealTracks in style: 3329:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm LoungeFunkSwells Ev16 080 RealTracks in style: 4192:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm SongwriterPickingSyncopated Ev16 080 RealTracks in style: 1840:Synth Pad, PopModernGrooveMellow Ev16 075 RealTracks in song: 1761:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Pop16ths Ev16 085 RealTracks in song: 1543:Synth Pad, PopBelieve Ev16 065 RealDrums in Song:ModernCountry16ths^1-a:Closed Hat, Snare , b:Ride & Snare Also put a Liverpool Piano, but snagged the midi and ran it through one of my pianos, as I always do
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David,
Love this... It sounds like it could be one of those songs in a hit summer movie.
Great vocal and mix. The piano is excellent.
Bob
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Beautiful, really beautiful.
The music's outstanding, the lyrics are great and you sing it like you really mean it.
Must have been a special angel!
Rob and Anne-Marie
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Garbage Can? OMG, NO!!
Kiss that angel good morning.
This is Killer...
An incredible Write. Your Best. SO much Heart.
Chills.
WOW.
Pitch this.
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Love Without Parole - a stroke of genius, right there. BRAVO.
Absolute genius, from the first note to the last, from the first word to the last. Hats off to you, sir, a thousandfold.
P.S. Floyd has it SPOT ON. What more can I say? Nothing more. BRAVO.
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Sounds like you are really feeling the lyrics on this one Dave. I hear pain, anquish, hurt, depths of emotions. Glad you pulled that napkin out of the can, and produced it into a song.
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Hey thanks Bob!!
I am glad you liked it.
Yes, I had almost given up on it, until that angel whispered in my ear, and I said, yeah, it's in the wrong key!!!
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Oh doh!!
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HI David,
What a great lyric and tune! Excellent choice of backing tracks. This is 0one of your better vocals - none of them are bad - but this one really shines. I like your voice in the lower register.
And yeah, sometimes I wonder what His plan is. But, it seems to end up better than if I'd followed my thoughts.
Great choice dragging this out of the trash can.. You're sounding better and better - I know, it's hard to improve on excellence - but you somehow manage.
Best to you,
Alan
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You can find my music at: www.herbhartley.comAdd nothing that adds nothing to the music. You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both. The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.
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Hi, David. What they said - good write, emotionally sung. Yeah, changing key can make a huge difference - even with "robot" vocalists. I've put tracks together and the worked on the vocal and it sounded bad. Change key, and Wow, what a difference. Good think that messenger got to you in time!  And you can grab MIDI for those piano tracks? Something I need to remember.
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David, "I'm doing love without parole", what a great line.
I'm glad you didn't give up on this one.
Outstanding song.
PS - God works in strange ways doesn't he.
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David, it’s always a good idea to take a second look at the throwaways. This is really good with a fine emotionally delivered lyric. I keep saying this, one of your best, Tom
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David, love everything about this song. It's just ridiculously awesome. I probably would have loved it in C, too. Nice one!
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Hello David,
The way you create your songs sounds familiair, except for the angel.
I walk across all the keys, find one that looks alright, change it again and often I come back to the first key I started when making the song.
What does that tell me? Nothing else than I have to walk that path of trial and error, again and again.
No angels, no nothing, else then my battered head that can turn a problem into something creative...
But since you have that angel, you are a lucky guy. The song is very good, the lyrics too and you sing it like out of the bottom of your heart and toes.
So, like I said, (again) a very good song. That's actually what I can expect from you and you always deliver ;-)
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Hey Rob and Anne-Marie, Great to see you. Thank you so much. That is very sweet! Glad you liked it.
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David
Thank you of this song
Beautiful and touching
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Thanks Floyd! I appreciate it, man! That's good advice on the angel. Should I also love her like the devil when she gets back home???
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Excellent write, and I really like the way you deliver these lyrics.
I think it was a good idea to go 3 semitones down, because (at least in my opinion) your voice sounds better there without losing its emotional impact.
Good stuff!
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David,
The melody and lyrics are somewhat reminiscent of John Lennon.
it's very beautiful.
And it's a slightly sad love song.
The accompaniment is also perfect for this song.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.
Best regards.
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Who would have known??? Your angel, I guess. And now us. Love the title, then the song strengthened that feeling. I really like the melody on this one, too. Man, I like how you produce it all with such a good vocal. Feelings. Honest feelings. Loved it all, David.
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