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Well, sometimes it is the simple things.

I had another back of the cocktail napkin lyric song and I recorded it, and HATED IT. I was like, man, this horrible. Garbage can. No way to fix it. Then I went to sleep.

When I woke up, an angel whispered in my ear:

Don't do it in C. Just change it to the key A and you will be fine.

So I did. Now I don't think it is quite so horrible anymore. Just a key change. Who would have known???

LOVE WITHOUT PAROLE

By David Snyder

https://soundcloud.com/david-snyder-gigs4/love-without-parole

V1

Yesterday we were eighteen, I can smell that summer rain
I still miss your breathless kiss, and how your sweetness felt like pain
And yeah, I remember you, and when I do, I feel in debt, but no regrets
So how come you're the thing that hurts me
the most when I look back
why would a loving Universe make a heart that works like that

CH

I think you own some part of me and I can't buy it back
I'm a hostage to your memory, why did you do that
and there's some tiny hole inside my heart where you will always be
and I'm doing love without parole, oh yeah
And no one knows but you
how much I loved you
and no one knows but you
what love without parole has done
to me

V2

They say the man upstairs, always has a plan
But the way he makes our hearts, I just don’t understand
One day the world is young, next day the world is old
One day your heart’s on fire, next day it’s all gone cold

CH

I think you own some part of me and I can't buy it back
I'm a hostage to your memory, why did you do that
and there's some tiny hole inside my heart where you will always be
and I'm doing love without parole, oh yeah
And no one knows but you
how much I loved you
and no one knows but you
what love without parole has done
to me
to me, oh oh
this love without parole
this love without parole
is killing me

All words and music copyright 2024 by David Snyder

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David,

Love this... It sounds like it could be one of those songs in a hit summer movie.

Great vocal and mix. The piano is excellent.

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Beautiful, really beautiful.
The music's outstanding, the lyrics are great and you sing it like you really mean it.
Must have been a special angel!

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Garbage Can? OMG, NO!!

Kiss that angel good morning.
This is Killer...
An incredible Write. Your Best. SO much Heart.
Chills.

WOW.

Pitch this.

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Love Without Parole - a stroke of genius, right there. BRAVO.

Absolute genius, from the first note to the last, from the first word to the last. Hats off to you, sir, a thousandfold.

P.S. Floyd has it SPOT ON. What more can I say? Nothing more. BRAVO.

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Sounds like you are really feeling the lyrics on this one Dave. I hear pain, anquish, hurt, depths of emotions. Glad you pulled that napkin out of the can, and produced it into a song.


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Hey thanks Bob!!

I am glad you liked it.

Yes, I had almost given up on it, until that angel whispered in my ear, and I said, yeah, it's in the wrong key!!!

🙂

Oh doh!!

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HI David,

What a great lyric and tune! Excellent choice of backing tracks. This is 0one of your better vocals - none of them are bad - but this one really shines. I like your voice in the lower register.

And yeah, sometimes I wonder what His plan is. But, it seems to end up better than if I'd followed my thoughts.
Great choice dragging this out of the trash can.. You're sounding better and better - I know, it's hard to improve on excellence - but you somehow manage.

Best to you,

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Nice work.


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Hi, David.

What they said - good write, emotionally sung.

Yeah, changing key can make a huge difference - even with "robot" vocalists. I've put tracks together and the worked on the vocal and it sounded bad. Change key, and Wow, what a difference.

Good think that messenger got to you in time! smile

And you can grab MIDI for those piano tracks? Something I need to remember.


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David, "I'm doing love without parole", what a great line.
I'm glad you didn't give up on this one.
Outstanding song.
PS - God works in strange ways doesn't he.


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David, it’s always a good idea to take a second look at the throwaways. This is really good with a fine emotionally delivered lyric. I keep saying this, one of your best, Tom

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David, love everything about this song. It's just ridiculously awesome. I probably would have loved it in C, too. Nice one!

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Hello David,

The way you create your songs sounds familiair, except for the angel.
I walk across all the keys, find one that looks alright, change it again and often I come back to the first key I started when making the song.
What does that tell me? Nothing else than I have to walk that path of trial and error, again and again.
No angels, no nothing, else then my battered head that can turn a problem into something creative...

But since you have that angel, you are a lucky guy. The song is very good, the lyrics too and you sing it like out of the bottom of your heart and toes.
So, like I said, (again) a very good song. That's actually what I can expect from you and you always deliver ;-)

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Hey Rob and Anne-Marie,

Great to see you. Thank you so much. That is very sweet!

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Glad you liked it.

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David

Thank you of this song
Beautiful and touching

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Thanks Floyd! I appreciate it, man!

That's good advice on the angel.

Should I also love her like the devil when she gets back home???

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Excellent write, and I really like the way you deliver these lyrics.
I think it was a good idea to go 3 semitones down, because (at least in my opinion) your voice sounds better there without losing its emotional impact.
Good stuff!


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David,

The melody and lyrics are somewhat reminiscent of John Lennon.
it's very beautiful.
And it's a slightly sad love song.
The accompaniment is also perfect for this song.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

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Who would have known??? Your angel, I guess. And now us. Love the title, then the song strengthened that feeling. I really like the melody on this one, too. Man, I like how you produce it all with such a good vocal. Feelings. Honest feelings. Loved it all, David.


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